Need help organizing my panels!
I fully admit I'm a novice to making comics - as much as I've focused on art throughout my life, I'm still not confident in my ability to organize comic panels in a way that really flows together. My goal is to make my work look professional, so I've included a set of thumbnail sketches to hopefully get some good critique from!
This is the first four pages of my graphic novel so far. Things are definitely subject to change. It's very quick sketches so I'll detail the panels below.Page 1:
So the first one (top left) is my splash page. Shows my character and setting, and hopefully looks badass to hook you in!Page 2:
Next we have my first steps on panel work, I'm more or less satisfied with how I organized them but I still think it could be better. The largest panel, underneath his closed eyes shot, is supposed to be a side view of him bound in chains - the monolith behind him has some material growing out the back of it which I hope to make it vaguely resemble wings, but this is more symbolic than anything and isn't really necessary, so input on what sort of larger panel shot I could use here is definitely helpful.
The two sequentials after that are supposed to be his limp hand clenching into a fist. And then finally an ant's eye view of the monolith behind him opening its seven eyes (which I need to find a way to show they are closed before this).
To mirror the monolith, a final shot of my character opening his eyes.Page 3:
Heading into action panels now, where I probably need the most practice. He sees his arms bound by chains, gets pissed off, braces himself and then pulls forward on them, breaking the chains from their posts/architecture, and breaking the architecture apart as well. The liquid he's standing in splashes forward. More or less my "we're dealing with a badass here" panel shot. (This is a dreamworld so I can go crazy with physical limitations)Page 4:
Recovering from his escape, a bright light shines behind him, and he turns around to discover the monolith is glowing. The monolith glowing thing I'm not sure I'll even use, though.
And in case it's hard to read, a full script of this chicken scratch nonsense:
In our first moments, and our last...
...the desire for it is no different.
Our lives always return to one inescapable truth:
We are prisoners.
Bound by mind -- body -- and fate...
...determined to break free.
Your persistence really is quite... sickening.
Anyway, any input on these thumbnails, especially in the area of organizing my panels, is greatly appreciated.